Studying art in school improves students' performance in other subjects, because it is easier for multi-skilled students to learn new things. That's why art should be obligatory in schools. Do you agree or disagree?

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is the most prominent part of community life and
art
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education
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has various
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fields
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as music,
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, visual arts and dancing. Most people agree that
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education
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should improve at
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. it will provide
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many
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benefits. In
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reasons of agree. It is clear that
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arts at
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students
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enhance their intellectual knowledge
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as decision-making, risk-taking and social skills etc. Extra-curriculum
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like arts enhance
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concentration. That way it will help to improve children's academic achievements.
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art
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that art
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improves
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students
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greater flexibility for multiple
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,
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would aid to attain
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mind relaxation and experience amusement because it contained physical and mental
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through
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brain functions. I agree at
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and would reduce pressure on main
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difficulties.
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at
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will negatively affect
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students
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mental health because
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system
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,
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would face academic failures. That's why
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should implement
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education
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activities
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at
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participant
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extra-curriculum
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help to reduce depression compared to the
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who did not. That way,
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would stimulate
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personality traits. In conclusion, after a thorough analysis of the topic,
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education
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has a crucial part of
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life because it would enhance creativity,
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and social
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skills in
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life. I agree that
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education
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is
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on
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academic
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Critical thinking
  • Motor skills
  • Creativity
  • Perspectives
  • Emotional outlet
  • Cultural appreciation
  • Global awareness
  • Historical art movements
  • Spatial intelligence
  • Curriculum overload
  • Non-competitive
  • Exposure
  • Cross-disciplinary benefits
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