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Working from home is becoming increasingly popular. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays, there is a rising trend of working from
home
.
This
 helps
people
 take care of their family themselves and reduces the travel duration to their workplace, though it can affect their
health
 and devoid them from developing a social life. The effect of
this
 new trend on
people
's well-being and social life could be detrimental. Working from
home
 provides an opportunity for the
job
 holders of attending to their families personally, and it
also
 saves their
time
 spent travelling to the office. As many of the workers have children, who need to be taken care of, they find it difficult to hire a babysitter who could fill in for them during office hours and the
time
 needed to go to and from the workplace.
This
 can be overcome if they can work from
home
 along with taking care of their children. It gives them extra
time
 with the family by reducing travel
time
. As the
job
 holders stay
home
 for work, there won't be any physical activity they will be involved in, affecting their
health
.
People
 tend to be socially active when they come across
different
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. Due to lack of physical activity, the
people
 working from
home
 might be affected by various
health
 issues like obesity. As they won't be coming across other
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people
peopl
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people
 while they work from
home
, their mental well-being might get affected leading to more stress. The increase in the number of individuals working from
home
 is seen these days.though it provides more
time
 and attention to family members of the
job
 holders, their physical and mental
health
 both are at risk. The effect on the well-being of a person should be given more importance along with managing their personal responsibilities.
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