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Some people think that work is the most important thing of people’s life. Without the success of career, life become meaningless. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
 say that
work
 is the most important thing in
life
.Without the success in the career,
life
 becomes illogical.As far as my opinion is concerned, I fully agree with
this
 statement because of the following reasons. As we all know that without success your
life
 is worst.
Life
 is meaningful when you have some goals in future and you
work
 day and night hard to achieve those goals.Without , a goal
life
 is meaningless because
life
 is all about achieving something.Whatever you
work
 whatever you do your only aim should be going at the peak of that
work
.Because in
this
 world
people
 don'
t
 know they know your
work
.
Furthermore
 adding the goal to your future and you should aim that in
work
 you have to be on the peak you have to be successful you should
work
 hard day time to achieve that goal.
This
 world doesn'
t
 know your hardworking they only know your success and
life
 gets interesting when you have a goal to achieve something bigger in
life
.
On the other hand
,
people
 who don'
t
 have an interest in
work
 or don'
t
 think their
work
 is important are the losers they never promote to higher ranks of their
work
 because they are lazy in their
work
 and at the end of their
life
 they feel sad that they never think that their
work
 is important or sad because of their laziness. To conclude my essay I will appreciate those
people
 who
work
 hard,their
work
 is important for them or their goal is important for them rather than those who show laziness in their
work
 who don'
t
 have any goal in their
life
 have a meaningless
life
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