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Some children spend hours playing on their phone. Why is it the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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 and teenagers use their phones for hours each day.
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, in my opinion, results from social media platforms' exceptional ability to keep users' attention. It should be viewed as a negative development because it can be harmful to
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's mental health. Social media algorithms are extremely good at providing people with content that will hold their attention. They track user behaviour like search history and engagement and use machine learning to analyze the data gathered. In
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 approach, they can offer users an endless stream of postings optimized to keep their interest. Since
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 tend to lack self-control, they may be unable to resist those personalized posts and wind up wasting too much time on their phones. Unfortunately, hours of phone time every day can harm
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's mental health. Perfectly filtered pictures and staged videos on social media create an unrealistic world for
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 scrolling through their feeds. Consuming too much content like
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 may make them unhappy with who they are. Consider the body image issues that Instagram has caused in teenage girls. After seeing post after post of fitness influencers who appear to have perfect lives and bodies, some adolescent girls may find it very difficult to refrain from comparing themselves to those influencers. It is not surprising that so many start worrying about their physical attractiveness.
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