Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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the sentence that physical strength is important for success
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athletic
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. Yes, most
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sport game competitions
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exhibited for people to
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their
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strength
strenght
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strength
to
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others'
body
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also
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games
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fully options in the
body
are called today paralympic
games
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games
need much more inside energy to fight with
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their
body
and
also
need the motivation to overcome their fear. In
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not just
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any one
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can
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over come
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the bad imagination inside our
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.
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just only incapable physical only but normal athletic need
this
mental
strenght
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strength
to fight with problems in their mind
such
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their
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. Because of the name 'sport' is something evolve the
strengthen
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of your
body
. we are having the
olypic
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Olympic
Olympics
game to make a
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competition
compitition
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competition
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strength
strengh
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of people.
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every sport
need
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the fully
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strength
strenght
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strength
of the
body
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, Football
player
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,
they
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need to keep their
body
fit and
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firm
ferm
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fit
by doing
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exercise
exercises
excercise
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exercise
, go to
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and
practice
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alomst
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almost
everyday
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.
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summary
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, I think we both need two of them physical and mental
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strength
strenght
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strength
to win the
games
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neither
nethier
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neither
two of them can't
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separate
seperate
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separate
from each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical conditioning
  • athleticism
  • physical training
  • muscle strength
  • mental resilience
  • psychological preparedness
  • mental toughness
  • confidence
  • precision
  • focus
  • mental strategies
  • mental fortitude
  • brute strength
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