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Although more and more people read the news on the internet, newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of people.

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benefits
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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