You have been invited to a networking conference for your field of work. Write a letter to your immediate manager. In your letter: • Describe the invitation you received and why it is important to you • Explain why the conference would be beneficial for you and the company • Ask for the company for time off to attend and to cover some of the travel costs

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John, I am writing

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letter to provide you

information

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received to attend the networking conference at Hybrid Company on

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of July. As

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conference is important for me because I will learn new skills which assists in my specialization. I have received the invitation as I got

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the award

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best performance in networking

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year from our company.

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seminar will enhance my knowledge which will be useful at

office

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aid

company

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by providing the lecture to my team members and other employees who

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interested in

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topic. I have to take leave for three days. It is in Sydney,

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is 6 hours from my place. I request

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if you can give me off with pay and if possible you can take care of my travelling expenses according to the policy of

organization

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. I look forward to hearing from you and expect paid leave and travelling

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. Yours Sincerely, Perry

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

163 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Many students choose to study at colleges and universities that are far away from the places where they grew up. Do the benefits of this outweigh the drawbacks?

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