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Some believe that people are naturally born leaders while others feel that leadership skills can develop.

It is a common belief that leadership is given by nature.
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 the country, others claim that leadership can be learnt. In my opinion, it is not something to be achieved but
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 found in humans. I will
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 explain in detail about
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, it can be said that some experts argue that
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come up with their born skills than
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developing
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 skills. The person in charge should have a strong personality in order to take the lead.
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, a person who is a leader starts from their children by how they organize
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,
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 cannot learn to be positive, inspiring and enthusiastic.
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, it is understandable for
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 to believe that the ability to take a lead is a characteristic, which is naturally born.
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, we cannot ignore the fact that life experience plays a major role in shaping
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 personalities and characters. As hard, as it may sound the ability to take control can be honed through training as well as personal experience.
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, teachers prefer to give them responsibilities for class-related things. Leadership requires assertiveness, which can be developed and learned over time. There are instances a person is not born into a family of
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 but turns out to be a good leader. To conclude, despite some reasonable points to claim that
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 are naturally born
leaders
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 some
people
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 are born as
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 while others become rulers by their choice and by learning it and utmost attention with the passage of time.

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