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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this disctinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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It is important for the kids to learn the difference between the good and bad in the beginning.Punishment should be given to teaching them.As far as my opinion is concerned, I fully agreed with the above statement.
To begin
, with right and wrong.
This
 world is full of
both
 good and bad people.Parents and teachers
both
 look eyes at children because if they don'
t
 teach them no one will teach them.It is the responsibility of parents and teachers
both
 because they teach them every lesson of life.In the early stage teachers and ,parents
both
 tell them
this
 is bad and
this
 wrong, it is right and it is a bad thing to do in life.
Furthermore
, when you are a kid or young you have the full ability to learn as compared to when you are getting old.
On the other hand
, if someone does a bad or wrong thing he/she should be punished,if we don'
t
 give him/her punishment he/she can'
t
 know the difference between good and bad.
Instead
 of beating ,children they
both
 tell them if they do something bad to others it will turn back to them and teach them to say sorry to those they have done wrong. The punishment should be of making them realize that they have done wrong the advantage of
this
 discipline is that if they did anything bad in future they automatically realize that it is wrong. To conclude, in my essay I will give advice to
both
 that they should teach their children about good and bad at an early age and if they do something wrong they shouldn'
t
 beat them or insult them they should realize what they have done wrong .
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