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Many people find it difficult to give a speech or presentation in public. Some people suggest that schools should teach children to speak in public. How is it important to speak in public? Do you agree or disagree that school should teach at school?

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Introduction
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 of people find it hard to give a speech or presentation in public.Some people suggest that
school
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 is responsible to teach children to speak in public.As far as my opinion is concerned
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 fully agreed
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that
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school
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schools
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 should
taught
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teach
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Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, children
learns
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learn
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there
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their
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 basics in
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school
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.And parents should appeal to teachers that public fear should be removed from their kids.It is
responsibility
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the responsibility
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 of teachers that two days
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a week they should have
class
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a class
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 of speaking.On
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first
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the first
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 day half of
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students
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the students
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 come to
stage
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the stage
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 and
teacher
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the teacher
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give
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gives
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 them
topic
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a topic
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 to speak on and on
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the second
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second day
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 others get
chance
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a chance
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to
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yo
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to
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 speak. The advantage of
this
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 will be that in future they will not face difficulty
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speaking
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 in public.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, in
today
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today's
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 world it is very important to speak in public because in
university
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the university
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 there are
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the presentation
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presentation
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presentations
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of
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on
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 almost every subject and it has marks
to
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.
Body paragraph 3
Furthermore
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,
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 should know how to speak in
audience
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the audience
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 because if he/she
don't
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won't
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 know how to speak they will not gain confidence and they will be
one
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apply
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of
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dull
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the dull
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students
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.Other than that, we all know that by speaking in public you can achieve your goals
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because
beacuse
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because
 you will have no fear
from
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of
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public
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the public
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.
Conclusion
To conclude in my essay,
i
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 must say that
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school
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schools
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 should teach
students
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 how to speak in public and by giving them classes
of
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apply
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speaking they should gain confidence in their
students
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.To end my essay at
the
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apply
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end
i
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 will give advice to
students
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 to participate in these types of functions it should be good for them in future

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