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Many people cant speak or present well in public, an idea is to start training from the school.State if it is important to speak well in public.Do you agree or disagree.

A suggestion is to start training from the school because the majority of the people cannot perform public speaking well. It is a great advantage to speak well in public, but I do definitely believe that it is not really important. The institution is where
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secondary learning can be achieved.
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, education can be taught in the house wherein the parents should be the
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, the school is where
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 wider range of theoretical and practical knowledge could be acquired. A good public speaker is a gift and a talent. There are few
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 having a high intellectual capacity, but unfortunately not really good
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 speaking extemporaneously with the public. There are things to be considered
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 self-esteem or capacity to express oneself when out of one's comfort zone.
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, one is having good performance in writing, but not really good in speaking due to poor self-esteem. It is preferable an excellent idea if in school there should be a balance of
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oral and writing performance, in
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 to enhance or boost the confidence of the student. In
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, we are encouraging them to speak properly in public. But, we
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 have to consider those whose having
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 with their speaking
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. It is highly appreciated if one could speak well in public in
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 prevent miscommunication and misunderstanding.
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speaker
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they say can be a good leader.

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