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Some people think governments should spend as much money as possible exploring outer space. Others argue they should spend the money for poor people. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Nowadays, some individuals consider that the government should spend billions of US dollars on
space
 exploration, while there is
also
 growing debate over whether we should aim to resolve issues like poverty rather than focusing on expensive high technology so-called vanity
projects
.
Although
 the expense of exploring
space
 is admittedly high,
such
projects
 may give us a way to offset those problems like employment issues via job creation and to improve out-of-date agricultural techniques through new experimentation. There are still urgent matters which require immediate steps like looking after the poor. Obviously, we know how dire
this
 phenomenon is, but few attempts have been made to stop its development. China,
for instance
, is planning a hugely expensive voyage to Mars when a significant portion of its people lives in impoverishment. On a personal level, I believe we could use a large amount of
this
 money to drastically improve the lives of many people’s loved ones.
Hence
, the justification for exploring the universe does not take into consideration the well-being of those in poverty.
Nonetheless
, developing
space
 technology has numerous benefits for our civilization. Agriculture,
it
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plays an essential role in our daily lives with a lot of people working in the farming and agri-food industries. By procuring accurate and up-to-date information on soil fertility, precipitation forecasts, and crop conditions; satellites help farmers manage their harvests and maximize their yields more sustainably.
Furthermore
, these
projects
 can provide opportunities for working in high-tech jobs in many countries. The demand for occupations
such
 as engineers would surge, resulting in the effect of creating many employment opportunities in fields
such
 as electrical engineering, robotics, etc.
As a result
, there are arguments both for and against the expenditure of poverty-stricken people in need in lieu of expensive
space
projects
, but I am convinced that we should expend as much money as possible on
space
 exploration as all humanity will reap the benefits in the long term.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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