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Some people believe bicycle has lot of advantages whereas others believe bicycle has more disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #bicycle
Some
people
 think
bicycle
 has more
advantages
 while others
bicycle
 had a lot of
advantages
.As far as my opinion is concerned, I will go with the
advantages
 of the
bicycle
 because of the following reasons.
To begin
 with,the
advantages
 of the
bicycle
 are if you are riding a
bicycle
 you will remain fit because riding a
bicycle
 is one of the best exercises.In the gym there are
also
 stationary bicycles to do exercise the best advantage is that your belly will remain fit and you will be not fat.
Furthermore
, another advantage is that if you are going to school or a job you don't have to pay because you are going by
bicycle
.Nowadays
people
 use bicycles to go to job or anywhere because they want to be fit.
On the other hand
,
people
 who think bicycles have many disadvantages.The
first
 disadvantage is that if you are going somewhere by
bicycle
 you can be late. Travelling On a
bicycle
 may get you late because the
bicycle
 is slow as compared to other transport.Another disadvantage is that you cannot go for long rides because you will be tied by driving a
bicycle
.The best transport to go to school, college, university and job is public transport as compared to a
bicycle
. To conclude in my essay, I will advise riding a
bicycle
 for a short distance it maintains your fitness and makes you fit and healthy it is the best to exercise to control your belly and it
also
 works for many diseases.And at the
,
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end I will say to
people
 to ride a
bicycle
 because it has many
advantages
.
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