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Band 6

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why do people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?

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Nowadays, there is an increasing number of
people
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 choosing to buy foreign
food
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instead
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 of local
food
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. I do believe that there are many reasons behind
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 phenomenon and we can implement numerous methods to foster local
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 consumption.
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,
people
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 prefer overseas
food
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due to
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 its
quality
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 and standard of safety.
It is clear that
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 the foods which are exported to other countries around the world have undergone a
strickly
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 check policy to ensure the ingredients list and the origin of
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.
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, in turn, has attracted
people
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 to believe and purchase foreign
food
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.
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, imported
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 contains a diversity of substances that are good for
people
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’s health.
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, some foods from developed countries like fruits, milk, and so on have higher nutrient rates.
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, the goods exchange policy among the countries has contributed to resident’s imported
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 choices. These
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 have appeared in lots of markets and
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,
people
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 will tend to purchase imported
food
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that is
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 good and safe for their health. To tackle
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 problem, I think that enhancing
people
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’s awareness about the
quality
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 of local
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 through the
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 should be considered the most effective
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 solution. Some media organizations can generate advertisement programs for residents to know more about
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 produced locally.
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, the business and local farmers implement
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 processes to ensure fresh ingredients and detailed product labeling.
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, the local
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 are
also
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 famous and become the choice of many
people
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. In conclusion,
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foreign
food
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 has been consumed more than local ones
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 its
quality
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 and safety standards. To boost the number of purchasing domestic
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, we can promote these
products
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' development through advertisements and ensure their
quality
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.

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Ensure more detailed and relevant specific examples to strengthen your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a consistent and clear logical structure throughout the essay by explicitly connecting your ideas.
introduction conclusion present
The essay effectively presents a clear introduction and a well-rounded conclusion.
complete response
It responds to the task comprehensively, addressing both reasons for buying imported food and methods to encourage buying local food.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

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  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • allure
  • novelty
  • diversity
  • perception
  • premium
  • globalization
  • cuisines
  • economic factors
  • subsidies
  • tariffs
  • competitive
  • farm-to-table
  • eco-conscious
  • consumption
  • sustainability
  • local economy
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