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A number of university courses require students to undertake a period of unpaid work as part of their program. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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Students
 have now been asked to complete
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period
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unpaid
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an unpaid
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internship
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 as a part of their program while studying at the University.
This
 practice has its own pros and cons. I would like to note down some important advantages as well as disadvantages on the same.
First
 and foremost it is always better to have
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hands on
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 experience than knowledge of theory alone. Unpaid
jobs
 are going to be a huge bonus for the
students
 who are about to start their
career
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 once they are graduated. A graduate in
hospitality
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 and tourism industry will not be confident enough to face customers from various backgrounds on his
first
 day of office unless he has experienced
this
 while at university, performing voluntary
jobs
.
This
 initial experience that one acquires from unpaid
jobs
 is invaluable.
The voluntary
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jobs
also
 help
students
 to learn from their mistakes
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in order
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 to develop good work habits,
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 training and knowledge to obtain employment.
On the contrary
, voluntary
jobs
 do have their own downsides. Some
students
 can find
this
 program quite difficult to cope
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with. Focusing on work as well as studies can be impossible at times
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as a result
the
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academic
performances
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 can be affected.
This
 situation might create panic not just among
students
 but
also
their
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 parents.
Students
 may decide to leave college due to
this
 added pressure. To sum up, voluntary or unpaid
jobs
 for
students
 while at university can have some setbacks but as discussed above the advantages clearly outweigh the disadvantages and can be beneficial in long run.
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