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Overpopulation is a big problem today in many major urban centers. What are the causes, and possible solutions?

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Growing
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population
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 is a big concern in today's world . Different reasons can be assigned for the increased
population
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for instance
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 lack of knowledge among individuals and
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 lies in governments taking measures to help people understand the consequences of the
population
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 . So , the
first
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 cause of
population
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 increase is the lack of sex
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 amongst various classes of people . Having
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 about sex
education
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 is still considered
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taboo in many developing and underdeveloped countries .
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 , less use of contraceptives
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the number
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 of children born in any country The solution for the issue is to organize campaigns by the government to educate the masses about the impact the adding
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 has on our planet earth and
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 . By discussing the root cause and teaching about
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the importance
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 of
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 of contraceptives , there can be a lot of
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 delivered to all the youngsters . To conclude , through proper
education
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 and
caompaigns
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campaigns
 by the governments , the young people can be delivered with the message about why
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population
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 is not a boon for
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the earth
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