Some believe in enrolling their children into the best schools so that they learn to socialize while others believe that homeschooling is a better option. Discuss both views and where do you stand on this topic?

Parents always try to provide
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education for their offspring in all ways. Many think that schools assist better future for their kids to become socialize while other
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that if children study at home
then
will gain good skills. In
this
essay, will discuss both
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of
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my views
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views
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and my opinion in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, it is
good
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choice for students if they study in
school
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a school
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environment because social learning is only gained with teachers and friends.
Moreover
, knowledge and skills can be improved in
school
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environment.
For example
, many youngsters make
career
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at
international
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level in games if they joined some academies and meet new people who
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them to choose
right
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path.
Furthermore
, it is
also
included in the syllabus as they can easily learn social behaviour through interacting with
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of students
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several.
On the other hand
, little one always feels comfortable with their guardians. The kids spend most of their time in the house with a mother and father and imitate almost all things from them. So, the old fogies should start teaching
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socialization to the babies from their house.
For instance
, if the
parental
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shows how to greet seniors, the young one will learn the importance of greeting.
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youngsters should be taught not to discriminate
any
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member of
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society and make
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new friends. In conclusion,
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enrolling in a superior learning institution and teaching in a home both have their own significance. So, I tend to feel socializing through
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parents
are
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the best alternative
instead
of fully
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on the schools.
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