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Inspite of advances made in agriculture still some people remain hungry.what are the causes of this

#inspite #advances #agriculture #people
Agriculture
 plays
vital
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 role in providing
food
 to the
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globe
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glob
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,
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in spite
inspite
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despite
 of the advancement in
agriculture
 many people in the world are still hungry. There are many reasons behind
this
 problem.Here in
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons
of
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insufficient
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the insufficient
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 availability of
food
 and their solutions.
Firstly
, in the modern world people are focusing on
indutrialization
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industrialization
industrialisation
 as they are converting
the
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agricultural land
in to
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the
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industrial land.
For instance
, in different
assian
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Asian
countries
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 we can see that at present the land for
agriculture
 has been reduced much as compared to the past.So government should take strict
actions
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 against these types of actions.There should be strict laws to overcome
this
 issue.
Secondly
, there are many
advance
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 technologies
has
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 been introduced in
the
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agriculture
 for increasing the production rate of crops and these advancements are very effective.
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In spite
Inspite
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In spite
 of
this
 there are many people
remained
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who remained
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hugry
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hungry
 as they can not get access
in
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at
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 cheap prices.
For example
, when
food
 reached
to
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the market it becomes very expensive and out of reach to the
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layman
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lay man
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layman
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 as
some times
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sometimes
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 due the bad weather conditions like floods it will become very difficult to mobile the products to the market.
Thus
, the local government should make plans for bad days and
also
 should
insure
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ensure
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 the availability of
appropriate
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an appropriate
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 transport system to mobile the harvested crops to the markets.
This
 problem should be tackled through
proper
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 transport system. To sum up, due to the universal
dezosters
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disasters
 like floods, and increase in industrialization reduce the availability of enough
food
 to the public. But with the help of appropriate steps taken by the
government
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 these issues should be solved.
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