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Inspite of advances made in agriculture still some people remain hungry.what are the causes of this

Agriculture
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 plays
vital
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 role in providing
food
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 to the
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globe
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,
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in spite
inspite
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despite
 of the advancement in
agriculture
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 many people in the world are still hungry. There are many reasons behind
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 problem.Here in
this
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of
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for
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insufficient
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the insufficient
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 availability of
food
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 and their solutions.
Firstly
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, in the modern world people are focusing on
indutrialization
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industrialization
industrialisation
 as they are converting
the
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agricultural land
in to
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the
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industrial land.
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, in different
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Asian
countries
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 we can see that at present the land for
agriculture
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 has been reduced much as compared to the past.So government should take strict
actions
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action
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 against these types of actions.There should be strict laws to overcome
this
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 issue.
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, there are many
advance
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 technologies
has
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 been introduced in
the
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agriculture
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 for increasing the production rate of crops and these advancements are very effective.
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In spite
Inspite
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In spite
 of
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 there are many people
remained
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who remained
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hugry
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hungry
 as they can not get access
in
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at
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 cheap prices.
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, when
food
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 reached
to
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the market it becomes very expensive and out of reach to the
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layman
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lay man
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layman
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some times
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sometimes
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 due the bad weather conditions like floods it will become very difficult to mobile the products to the market.
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, the local government should make plans for bad days and
also
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 should
insure
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ensure
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 the availability of
appropriate
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an appropriate
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 transport system to mobile the harvested crops to the markets.
This
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 problem should be tackled through
proper
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 transport system. To sum up, due to the universal
dezosters
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disasters
 like floods, and increase in industrialization reduce the availability of enough
food
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 to the public. But with the help of appropriate steps taken by the
government
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 these issues should be solved.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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