Some people think that it is too difficult for poor people or people from rural areas to go to university. So that the universities should make it especially easy for them. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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can be too burdensome for deprived
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or individuals from remote areas.
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, academic institutions should not make it difficult for them.
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I agree with the statement, I believe that
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should still do a thorough review and regulations in order for them to pursue a college degree. On the one hand, fundamentally, all individuals should have the same opportunity to get exposed to formal education regardless of their status and conditions.
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, formal
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such
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can help those who are struggling by providing them
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a scholarships
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excellent students, or student loans or accommodation closer to the varsity for those who live in
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so that it will lessen their burden
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transportation.
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, if the pupils are motivated by the
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of the academy, it is more likely they can give the best contribution to the school and society after graduation.
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it is a great idea to make it especially easy for indigent
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or Countryside community, it best believe to not give it too lightly to all the people just because they are poor or live in
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because it can cause some disadvantages too
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the freedom that they are given
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like does not take their study seriously just because it’s easy for them to get in.
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, the
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should do a thorough review and regulations for the students who
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willing to dedicate their study. Since might not all of them want to pursue
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formal education. To conclude, I admittedly agree for
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institutions should lessen their burden to pursue a study.
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,
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university
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still
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to give
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restrict
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requirements so that only
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highly motivated students can get the full advantage
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the school’s
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • barriers
  • limited access
  • financial constraints
  • equality and diversity
  • comprehensive approaches
  • scholarships
  • mentorship programs
  • academic support
  • root causes
  • maintaining academic standards
  • fairness
  • merit-based
  • inclusive higher education system
  • social and economic benefits
  • dynamism
  • innovation
  • tailored support
  • admission criteria
  • inclusive approach
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