an increasing number of children are overweight which could result many problems when they grow older both in terms of their health and health care costs . why do you think children are overwaght ? what could be done to solve this problem ?

children
's weight and its related health concerns have been an important issue for parents in recent years . Many studies have shown that nowadays
children
overall are fatter than in the past . In
this
essay, I will bring two probable reasons for
this
changing pattern and
also
I will recommend compelling solutions for them. the foremost reason which I prefer to explain is the significant impression of marketing media on the temptation of
children
.
In other words
, due to making attractive advertisements, food-related companies convince individuals to buy foods and especially snacks that they actually do not need.
As a result
of eating lots of foods that contain sugar and fat,
children
become more overweight.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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