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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditiond are difficult, such as the Sahar desert or the Antartic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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Tourism! is one of the biggest industries in the modern world. Tourism is an industry which can outshine any other industry.
In addition
 to
this
, nowadays tourists are more attracted to the extreme climatic conditions. Rather than, normal decent weather. But
this
 new fad does come with its own pros and cons. so, its pros and cons are discussed in the subsequent paragraphs.
Firstly
, the most important advantage of travelling to
such
 adverse
places
 is that it gives a great thrill, and adrenaline rush we get by travelling to
such
places
.
for example
, if we visit the Sahar desert or the Antarctic it will make us feel more alive than visiting a place where there is decent weather.
Secondly
, it gives you a break from your daily hectic routine. for reference, research says that taking a break from your daily work schedule can boost your productivity to the
next
 level and make you bloom like a lotus and illuminate your surrounding.
furthermore
, travelling to extreme weather improves your adaptivity.
On the other hand
, Travelling to
places
 which have extreme climatic conditions can affect you in the opposite way.
for example
, if your body is not physically fit travelling to an extremely hot or cold environment can cause a serious negative impact on it.
in addition
, visiting
such
places
 can cost a hefty amount of money and affect you economically. In conclusion, travelling to
places
 where conditions are difficult , not only has various advantages but
also
, has some disadvantages. so, I would suggest, one should only travel to
such
places
 by considering all the possible things and plan it
accordingly
.
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