Most people try to balance between work and other part of lives. Unfortunately, not many achieve this delivate balance. What are the main problems people are facing? What is the best way to overcome them?

Nowadays, many people are facing that couldn'
t
take enough
time
to use for their privates. In
this
essay, I will describe the reason why most workers are not able to achieve balance, in
work
and other parts of their lives.
First
of all, many people must spend so much
time
on their
work
instead
of their daily lives.
For example
, in my country, there are a lot of things to do in companies. Our supervisors force us to finish these tasks before the deadline. We must
work
for a long
time
even after the end of the
work
time
. Generally,
this
problem will be solved when the company hire enough workers.
However
, they can'
t
do it because the number of younger is decreasing in Japan.
Similarly
, the same problems maybe happen in the US, European countries and most part of the OECD countries.
On the other hand
, even if we could take some holidays, we can'
t
spend them playing with our children, shopping and going to restaurants with my wife. We are usually very tired of daily
work
.
Therefore
, we feel to want to spend
time
when we don'
t
have to
work
for healing ourselves.
For instance
, in Japan, the research shows the average overwork
time
is 30 hours a week. We have to
work
for a long
time
and we are tired too much in the current society. I personally believe that new technologies will solve these problems because they can improve our efficiency of
work
.
Consequently
, the government or the head of the company has to choose these techniques wisely. When our efficiency of
work
improves, the situation of
this
balance becomes better in the future.
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