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Some parents think that childcare centres provide the best services for children of pre-school age. Other working parents think that family members such as grandparents will be better carers for their kids. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Current
parents
 assume that preschool-age children should be nurtured by childcare
centres
,
while
 others think older relatives are a better option to care for the kids. I firmly believe that special
centres
 are the best services for children since they are professionals.
Moreover
, going to these
centres
 is a really important moment for a preschool-age child that should be experienced. First and foremost, the childcare
centres
 hire specialists, who graduated from universities and studied special courses
such
 as pedagogy, child psychology and the means of proper nurturing, so these workers know how to communicate with kids and what is essential to them at their age.
For instance
, there is an educational technique "Montessori", which is used in many public and private kindergartens, where teachers develop the basic life skills of toddlers and their natural interests methodologically. There are a number of positive feedbacks from
parents
, relatives and society about
this
 method.
On the other hand
, grandparents can look after kids, in that case, a child stays with relatives
instead
 of being surrounded by strangers in care
centres
. It might be really stressful and challenging for children to go a kindergarten.
However
, visiting these
centres
 is the first step in socialization and separation from
parents
, so every toddler needs to undergo it. An example of
it
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 can be adults, who did not use the services of
chilcare
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childcare
child care
centres
, they find it hard to interact with people even in adulthood. In conclusion, I speculate that
parents
 should use the help of childcare
centres
,
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 because it is a required phase of bringing up which stimulates
development
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the development
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 of many skills of a kid.
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task achievement
Ensure there is a clear overview at the beginning of the essay to outline what will be discussed, and try to maintain a balance in the discussion of both views before concluding with your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to ensure that the essay flows more naturally from one idea to the next and to better connect your points and examples.
task achievement
Include specific, detailed examples to support each viewpoint. Personal anecdotes or hypothetical scenarios can add depth to your argument and make it more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the conclusion summarises the key points effectively and reflects the arguments made throughout the essay, clearly stating your personal stance.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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