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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
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the map demonstrates the structure of
industrial
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the industrial
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 area in the town at
current
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the current
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 time, there
are
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 some housing around
a
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the
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sreright
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right
 way and a
squre
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square
that is
 located
at the end
 of
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the streight
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streight
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straight
 way.
additionaly
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, there is a river
at
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the north of the plane. by the next years, the future plane will have
cahnged
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changed
.
firstly
,
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the
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another
squre
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square
 which will locate
in
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south
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the south
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 of
current
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the current
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squre
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square
.
secounly
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, the location of housing will
cahange
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change
 in future. regarding scores that will add in
furure
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future
, a way will apply in the north of the current
squre
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square
 that will be continued
to
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over the river.
moreover
 the school and
play ground
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playground
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 or
another
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 side shops and medical
center
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 will have located at the
este
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estate
 and
suoth
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south
 of
plane
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the plane
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respectivly
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respectively
. to
summerize
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summarize
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, the industrial area will have converted into
better
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a better
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residensial
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residential
 area, by next years
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words squre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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