Some people think that keeping pets is good for children while others think it is dangerous and unhealthy. Which opinion do you agree with? Discuss both options and give examples

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Nowadays it is argued by a certain section of people that having domestic pets is good for a minor population, whilst others think that it is risky and unhealthy. In
this
context as far as I am concerned, I would agree with the first opinion.
This
statement will elaborate on both options
along with
examples.
Firstly
, having a
pet
such
as a dog or a cat in a house brings happiness, peace, and security to the family. As the targeted audience in
this
context
are
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children, having a domestic
pet
gives a
child
to act responsibly.
For example
, when a
child
gets bullied in school and
no
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one to communicate about it, they come home and talk to their
pet
, as they treat the
pet
as their companion.
This
supports the
child
mentally and physically as well.
Secondly
, as for the latter opinion, there are risks of having a
pet
as well,
,
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however
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I believe that
this
can be controlled by giving the necessary vaccinations to the
pet
.
For instance
, cats always find a way to sneak out of the house. It can carry contaminated bacterial creatures on them or rabies from the surrounding which could lead to a type of disease in the
child
. In conclusion, I believe regardless of the danger and unhealthy of keeping a
pet
can be always controlled and maintained by providing the necessary treatments. The core objective is that it supports the
child
to be independent, supportive, be responsible
of
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their own work
as well as
help
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helps
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them be healthy physically and mentally.
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task response
Ensure that your introduction clearly states your position on the topic. Start by addressing the prompt directly to set the tone for the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the logical flow between paragraphs by using transition words and phrases. This will make the essay easier to follow and understand.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • companion
  • responsibility
  • care
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • social skills
  • transmit
  • diseases
  • allergies
  • safety risks
  • time
  • effort
  • money
  • mature
  • handle
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