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Advantage and disadvantages of establishing new universities

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Introduction
In
this
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 contemporary
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era
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,higher
education
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 is very important for all. As per
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statement
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 more and more numbers of
universities
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 are building up day by day. Setting up of new higher
education
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 platform brings many advantages and disadvantages for all.
This
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 essay will discuss
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all the merits and demerits of setting up
of
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new
universities
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Body paragraph 1
To commence with, the
first
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 and foremost benefit of setting up
new
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a new
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 institute is that it provides
employments
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employment
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 to the teachers which are not getting proper wages.
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 of
that
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this
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 thing helps the students to give
education
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 at
lower
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 cost as possible which may
leads
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lead
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 a country towards positive development .
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, the headline of a famous newspaper makes it clear that
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the literacy
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 rate among
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children increased
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up to
upto
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up to
 78% in 2021 as compared to
year
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the year
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 2011 ,having only
38
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a 38
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% literacy rate.
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 these are
the
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some
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main reap benefits of establishing new
universities
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Body paragraph 2
On the flip side, the drawback of
construction
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the construction
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 of
new
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a new
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 academy cannot be neglected. Building up of new
education
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 platform requires a huge area of land in the cities.
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this
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 reason many local people need to migrate from their
birth place
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birthplace
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 to another place which is
very
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a very
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 pitiful condition for them. Along with
this
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of
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the institution
owner
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owners
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 sometimes may compromise with quality
educational
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 just for making
profit
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a profit
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 which can cause
downfall
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the downfall
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 of
country's
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the country's
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 economy .so these are
the
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some main losses of making new
universities
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Conclusion
In the conclusion,it is stated that
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 up
of
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new
universities
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 has some tremendous benefits for
the
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individuals and for the country as well to boost
up
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their development.
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However
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 sometimes it may
creates
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 many huge problems for local people.

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