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Band 4.5

Some say that new homes should be constructed in existing cities while others argue that new towns should be built (advantages/disadvantages)

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Many people think that houses have to be built in the
cities
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 already done while others believe that new
cities
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 should
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be
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by
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be
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constructed
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construct
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,the benefits regarding construction in existing
cities
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 are many like it makes
cities
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 larger and bigger which means more facilities and services
such
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 as public
transpot
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transport
,infrastructure projects and investment.
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also
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 it increases the chance to find jobs that are difficult to find in small
cities
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.Disadvantages may be like the city become more crowded which means more pollution and noise.
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,increase in the
percent
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 of people migrating from the crowded
cities
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 to the
counterside
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countryside
 has been noticed in the recent years .people in crowded
cities
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 are always
inpatient
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 and aggressive and there will be no enough spaces for social facilities as parks.it always takes
along
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a long
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 time to reach a place in large
cities
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 due to traffic.
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building
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,building
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 new
cities
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also
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has
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 positives and
negatives
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.positives like the designation of new towns is often modern and less harmful to the environment.it
also
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 makes the population in the
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existing
exisiting
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existing
cities
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 decrease.
negatives
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 can be the decline in the agricultural areas and the damage to the environment by construction.
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also
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 more money will be spent on infrastructure and other projects
already
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that already
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exists
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exist
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 in old
cities
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 in conclusion,construction in the existing
cities
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 has benefits and
negatives
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 while making new
cities
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 has positives and
negatives
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 and by taking the advantages regarding both in combination we can reach the best result which makes our life easier and more comfortable and sustain the environment clean for the
next
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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