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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In the modern
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 the differences between the nations
in
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around
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 the globe have
shrinked
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shrunk
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 since their
duwellers
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dwellers
 have equal opportunities to
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purchase
purchas
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purchase
 similar items from where they live. In
this
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about
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this
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 trend and explain why I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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this
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 development is beneficial.
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 with, if
people
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 can buy the same goods everywhere in the world, they can save money and time, which can use for
another useful activities
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 in their life.
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, in gone by days, some foodie
people
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traveled
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 to explore exotic
cusince
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cuisine
cuisines
, which were not available in their countries, while, some students and workers who were in foreign nations had to spend extra money and time for searching their native food and
products
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.
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, every individual may have a chance for experiencing
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 technology due to globalization. Some countries produce agricultural
products
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, while others mainly rely on technological items.
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, now all
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humans have a chance to order those
products
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through
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online or by going
their
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to their
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 local shops without any disparity. In
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,
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, most of the south Asian
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countries
country's
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 economy based on
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the plantation
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plantation
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plantations
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, they are the best buyers of Apple company and electronic
products
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among
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 the world.
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contrary
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,
people
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 spend unnessasaraly on the
products
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 because of availability.
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,
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 they have enough foods and
products
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 in the fridge and stores, they want to try different
products
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.
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, when
people
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 go to the supermarkets, they
tent
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 to
by
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buy
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 more than
one
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the
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 same
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products
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product
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 according to their country and its flavour. As a
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result
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results
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 some foods have to discard due to
short
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a short
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expiery
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expiry
 date. In conclusion,
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, some drawbacks can be seen
seen
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due to the availability of
same
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the same
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products
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 in the world, I suppose
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 is a good trend since
,
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 cost and time effective as well as technology goes to the village.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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