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Some people think that modern games can help children develop a wide range of skills, but others argue that traditional games can be much better for developing such skills. TO what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, part of citizens believes that to develop a wide range of skills in children the E-
games
 help them in it, whereas traditional
games
 can be much more effective in developing
such
 type of skills argue by other. I am completely in the favour of
this
 statement, and the reasons are analysed in the following paragraphs with a reasonable conclusion. To commence with, the up-most point is that toddlers always be fit physically and mentally. To explain it more, when they play traditional sports on the ground, their body parts move faster than usual, and with
this
 movement, they ever fit in their life.
Moreover
, it
also
 reduces stress from their mind, and they do their study very effectively or considerately.
For example
, Lionel Messi plays football on the field,
On the other hand
, Ninja is an E-gamer, and both have a vast difference in body, Messi is physical fit than the Ninja.
Furthermore
, traditional
games
 teach about peace and respect
of
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for
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 others. To spell it out more, when players in the ground they
never
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are never
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 angry in any situation and handle any difficult situation very easily, but other modern game players
they
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apply
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fell
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feel
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 much
angry
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more angry
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on
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in
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 every harsh condition and use bad words for their opponents. In conclusion, traditional
games
 like football, cricket and hockey help more to develop a vast range of
skill
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skills
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 in children than the modern
games
 because
it
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they
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 make child physically
fir
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fit
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 and
also
help
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helps
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 to relax their
mind
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minds
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 for their study. E-
Games
 increase train in the mind and swelling in the hand for that reason these
games
 are not good for children.
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