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Band 5

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Investing
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 railways and paying money for
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improving
improvig
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improving
 and expanding them is important and governments should invest money
on
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it
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. I strongly agree and in
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essay
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 I will explain about reasons. An important reason is that when railways and trains become better,
people
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 will be encouraged to
use
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 public transport more. I mean, if the number of trains increases and ways
expand
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, it will be
more
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easier and convenient for
public
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 to
use
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 them when they want to move from one part of the city to another so it can have a
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positive
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positive
 impact on
environment
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the environment
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. As an example, by using public transport,
people
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use
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 their own cars less so the usage of fossil fuels will be fallen. It can help everyone to have
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clean air.
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, the traffic issue will be solved especially in big cities and urban
centers
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. Another significant reason is that more
people
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 can find jobs in
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 kind of
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transport
trasport
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transport
. By increasing the number of stations and trains, jobs
such
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 as driver,sales assistant in shops of stations,
security
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 section will be available for those who are unemployed so it can affect society and might help
people
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 who are under
poverty
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 line. Investing
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 subways could
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 have financial benefits for
government
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the government
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 because lots of
people
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use
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 transport system each day. In conclusion,I agree that government should pay money for making railways’ quality better than
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 past and it can help in solving lots of problems which society is facing with these difficulties are the same in the whole world.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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