peoples's lives are now surrounded by advertisements. These advertisements have negative impact on people's lives.To what extend you agree or disagree?

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that show
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to
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people
until they can best choose to buy needs.
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these advertisements
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people
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completely
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agree with
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issue for some reason.
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advertiser
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demonstrate
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their
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produces
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to
people
cause of that they can choose what
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they buy and what kind of
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is
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to buy a new cellphone with
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she
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on the internet and read comments of
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.
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,
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unemployed
people
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advertisements. They can search on
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web and look at the new news about
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exam
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create
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job
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jobs
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with advertisements
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example, they make handcraft and show them to
people
by publicity. In conclusion, publicity not only is not bad
also
it is very important in our
life
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and is
good
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effect
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our life.
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