some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security . others think that people can not except to enjoy job and having permanent job is more important . discuss both the views and give your opinion.

It is an undeniable fact that when
its
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comes to
job
satisfaction
it is more important than
job
security, whilst others argue that
permanent
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job
has more benefits . The wages are
also
important in the
job
.
However
,
this
essay will discuss both points of
views
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view
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in the upcoming paragraph.
First
and foremost , when people feel more
satisfaction
in their
job
is
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it
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lead to
the
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productive result as well as careers .
Moreover
,
satisfied
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the satisfied
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worker performs their work with concentration and interest and
this
approach improve their results and they will achieve more in less time . Some companies
also
give rewards to their employees when they perform well in their field and these kinds of activities affect
other's
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performance . Nowadays,
the
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wages
also
affect the performance of organization staff.
By contrast
, for those who work with glossy
salaries
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it would be more difficult to achieve
the
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goals and stay motivated .
Furthermore
, many people do not spend their time with family and long working hours may affect their health
also
.
This
kind of
jobs
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also
affect
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the relationship of
family
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also
. To give
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clear
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a clar
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clar
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clear
example IT industry pays well , but the jobs are stressful and demanding . Someone who chooses a
job
in
industry
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will eventually burn out unable to cope with the pressure of
job
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the job
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. To conclude , career
satisfaction
is more important than money earned .If people love their careers, eventually , they will
also
earn well .In
this
era of
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fast-paced
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fast paced
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life
job
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satisfaction
is
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more
morer
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more
important .
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