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How people are benefiting from VPN? What are the consequences of using VPN in terms of security and data protection? Do you think the government should bring strict law to control of usage of VPN?

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advancement
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the advancement
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 of
technology
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,technology
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 some services have been provided
network
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 users
which
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and
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VPN
 is one of them.
VPN
 stands for Virtual Private Network, in
this
 essay some beneficial functions of
VPN
 and securities which come from using the
VPN
 will be discussed;
Also
, whether the government should regulate the strict legislation to control of
using
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use
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 of
VPN
 or not will be summarized as follows. There are several substantial impacts on using
VPN
, through which
VPN
 users can benefit from them in aspects of security.
Firstly
,
VPN
 could be able to secure
people
's networks. To illustrate more,
the
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most businesses have their own networks, in which they put some specific
data
 into
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the theme
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theme
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. So, without a doubt,
such
 valuable
data
 could be kept safe from other
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businessmen
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business men
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businessmen
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 through using
VPNs
.
Secondly
, another important function of
VPN
 is to hide
private
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the private
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 information of individuals. Since it is easy to gain access to everyone's personal
data
 by various methods used by hackers, so it could be imperative for
people
 to
use
VPN
. A survey conducted in London has revealed that approximately 85% of
people
 whose bank
account
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accounts
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 and credit cards had been hacked by hackers, did not have
VPNs
.
Consequently
,
people
 can enjoy
high level
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high-level
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 security, provided that they make
use
 of
VPNs
.
On the other hand
, there would be a question about ups which is whether the government authorities need to exercise control over using of you or not
?
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.
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 I find it difficult to
use
VPN
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VPNs
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 it some strict rules are put by the government because of
a
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 main reason. I believe that the vast majority of
people
 needing to have
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a VPN
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VPN
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VPNs
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 in order to secure their personal and private
informations
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information
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 prefer to not
use
 them by reason of strict laws. So, individuals’ personal
data
 are highly likely to be impersonated by hackers and web
browser
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browsers
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, as a consequence of which insecurity will increase in society. To sum up,
VPNs
 bring several significant merits for
people
 which have
positive
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 impact on their lives in terms of security.
First
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 one is to secure their networks and the
second
of
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is hiding their personal information
such
 as important
data
 related to their bank account and credit and credit cards;
Moreover
,
this
 writer Is of the opinion that regulating strict legislation for controlling of usage of
VPN
 cannot be a good idea because of increasing the insecurity in society
as a result
 of not using the
VPN
 by
people
.
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