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Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. Q: What is your opinion?

In recent times, space exploration has become a crucial aspect of science as the world evolves.
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this
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 is costly
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 money should
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be spent on more crucial things.The rest of the paragraph will be allocated to explain my opinion and give supportive references. First of all,science is expensive. Especially with the current Covid pandemic , whereby funds are spent on creating vaccines , it
deems it
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 necessary to
rather
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allocate resources to solve
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 disease.
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, many poorer countries can be assisted with samples of vaccines to curb the rise of
Covid
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, which I believe is more pressing than spending on space exploration.
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 the current situation of the
Russia and Ukraine
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Russia-Ukraine
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 war has created economic hardship worldwide.The economy is crushed.Some currencies like pounds and dollars have collapsed the economy of poorer African nations,
which
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 their currencies can not
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keep
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 up.
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, these less fortunate societies have less infrastructure
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 hospitals, good roads and so on .
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 governments of fortunate countries like the
U.S.A
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U.S.A.
 can allocate funds to support
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 people. In conclusion, money for space exploration should be spent on helping less fortunate states and investing some to research and produce more vaccines to help eradicate
Covid
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COVID
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 and other pandemic diseases.

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task response
Be clear on your view in the first line and keep a short plan in the intro.
coherence
Make ideas flow with simple links like and, but, so. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
language
Use only simple words. Keep to short and easy sentences.
content
Your view is clear.
content
You give reasons that link to the real world (Covid and war).
structure
There is a closing sentence that restates the view.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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