Homelessness is increasing in many major cities around the world. What do you think are the main causes of this problem and what measures could be taken to solve it?

Homelessness existing in any major city
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indicates
indictes
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indicates
a sign of poverty
of
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the country. Governments around the world have taken measures to solve
this
issue for years, but there has been
a
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very less improvement. Let’s look at the main cause of the problem.
First
,
drugs
have played
major
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role in the
people
in
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living
in
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the streets. During hardship in life,
people
tend to look for easy ways to suffer less and
drugs
make them feel less pain. Frequently
consumming
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consuming
drugs
will affect
worklife
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work life
and personal life.
This
results in
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losing
lossing
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losing
everything they owned and living off
streets
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.
Next
, in underdeveloped
countries
,
people
tend to have babies irrespective of not having a house. Many of these
countries
are
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overpopulated
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over populated
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overpopulated
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with
irresponsible
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the irresponsible
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government
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governments
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. Homelessness has been normalised in these
countries
and became part of their culture. When it comes to solving
such
a big issue, there are multiple
party
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involved who have to take responsibility.
First
,
government
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the government
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should take strong measures to control
drugs
of
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the streets.
People
who are affected by
drugs
should be treated with care
instead
of given punishment for the crime.
Second
,
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people
peope
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people
should vote right officers in the
government
who will take action against
drugs
.
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, many of the underdeveloped country’s
government
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are not systematic. Developed
countries
should help
the
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underdeveloped
countries
in
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creating
proper
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a proper
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method that could educate the public
of
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birth control,
drugs
and how each citizen have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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to the world. In conclusion, it is not
easy
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task to solve the problem. There are various other factors that
causes
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homelessness other than
drugs
and
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overpopulation
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over population
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overpopulation
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. If the
government
and
people
could actually take
it
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their
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responsibility
responsbility
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responsibility
to get involved and understand the causes
for
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this
problem
,
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than
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then
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things will start to improve in the world.
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