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Writing Samples
Band 8.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Give contact details for when you are away • Give instructions about how to care for your pet • Describe other household duties

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Hello Ahmed, Hope you’re doing greet. I miss you to the moon and back. Thank you for agreeing to look after my house and my dog Lulu during my holiday. To start, if you need to contact me for any reason during my holiday, please ring my phone number or just send a message either on WhatsApp or Facebook Messenger. Before I forget, I want to add that Lulu doesn’t really need much care. He needs to be fed twice daily. Make sure that he drinks plenty of fresh water every day, and you can take him outside each evening for a walk.
Finally
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, for security reasons, make sure that the doors and windows are locked inside, and keep the outside lights on at night. Thank you so much once again. I’m looking forward to seeing you when I return, and until we meet, please take care of yourself.
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, pick up the newspaper from the lawn every morning. Lots of love, Alaa
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task achievement
For a higher score, ensure that all instructions, especially about household duties, are clear and comprehensive. You could elaborate on what 'security reasons' might specifically include, and ensure the closing aligns with the natural tone of the letter.
coherence cohesion
While the letter is generally well-organized, improving transitions between the different instructions can increase coherence. For instance, using connectors like 'Firstly,' 'Secondly,' and 'Finally' can make the letter even more structured.
task achievement
The letter maintains a friendly and appropriate tone throughout, which is suitable for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is clear and follows a logical structure, making it easy for your friend to understand and follow your instructions.
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