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As housing is a basic need for people, government should provide free housing for everyone who can't afford it, To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There has been
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 in poverty in some developing and underdeveloped countries over the
last
 few years.
This
 has affected a large proportion of people and rocketed their woe, homeless and unemployed.
Therefore
, socialities argue that to tackle
this
 problem the government should support the settlement of poor residents.
This
 essay will discuss the abovementioned and illustrate both reasons to support my argument.  
To begin
 with, housing is a basic priority and it is a fundamental right of human beings. There is a responsibility and core; It can be deniable that needy and poor folks ought to be provided with housing facilities by the authorities. If done
otherwise
, people would die and suffer from hunger and disease. To be clear, when living in an improper environment
such
 as a slum,
this
 may impact undesirable consequences to the socialities
for example
 the outbreak of a pandemic and they might commit crimes. It can be seen that if they ignore
this
 issue, it might create
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 harmful to the region.
Although
 the previous reason has its merit, the government should
also
 consider other financial social support
for instance
 free education, healthcare services, and transportation. Many researchers indicate the national fund is the most spending on the education sector and
then
 public health. If they use their money to outweigh other purposes they might witness a crisis. Why will the stage sponsor low-income citizens than use their money for advanced purposes? Taking everything into account, building an effortless house for helping below in-line-citizen as a human right would deal with
this
 problem.
However
,
this
 solution might not tackle the major of these problems.
Hence
, they should look at what the main point and try to solve it step-by-step.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social safety net
  • Economic stability
  • Unemployment benefits
  • Financial security
  • Economic downturn
  • Poverty
  • Stimulate the economy
  • Job seeking
  • Dependency culture
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Government expenditure
  • Labor market
  • Fraud
  • Welfare abuse
  • Quality of life
  • Budget constraints
  • Economic strain
  • Public funds
  • Employment incentives
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