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The data show university sports courts between 1990 and now. Discuss about changes.

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The given data illustrates university
soprts
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sports
 courts. The time period is mentioned between 1990 and now. Let us discuss it in detail in the upcoming paragraphs . The data suggests that in 1990 there was a park
area
 on the left top side which is converted into
basketball
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a basketball
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 court now.
Little
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A little
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 bit down to
court
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the court
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 ,
car
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the car
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 park
area
change
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changed
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 into
tennis
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a tennis
the tennis
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 court . In 1990 it was on the right side of
area
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the area
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 while
outdoor
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the outdoor
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 pool become
indoor
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an indoor
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 pool now. It is
obivious
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obvious
 that changing room
lift
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lifts
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 down on the upper side of
fitness
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the fitness
a fitness
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 centre .
On the other hand
reception
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the reception
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area
 and the cafe
area
 remain unchanged . To give an overview it is clearly evident that there were many changes in 1990 and
current
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the current
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 situation .
Park
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The Park
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area
 and car
area
is totally disable
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is totally disabled
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 now. A new fitness centre is added.
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