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s the number of private cars has increased,so, too has the level pollution in many cities. what can be done to track all this increasing common problem? .

#cars #level #pollution #cities #track
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theses
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 days all over the world witness overpopulation ,which lead to massive usage of
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 . The question is what are the
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 solutions to solve
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most responsibilities
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 dependent on the government. due to, no role to decrease the ratio of cars . the main reason given to support
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 choice to transport .
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 and walking
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affect positively in
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town.
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force a company and corporation to provide the employee
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a special card to ride the bus or train .
Firstly
 ,increasing awareness in general
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public
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air pollution and
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global warming .
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human about the difference between
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artificial wants and actual needs .
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person
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 buy more than
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to
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 all their family. In conclusion , I believe that
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people do not care about
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abandon a lot of
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ownership
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 and force people to discipline .
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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