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Some people say patriotism causes problems and is negative overall. Others feel that it is beneficial for society at large. Do the advantages of patriotism outweigh its disadvantages?

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People
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 have different ideas about patriotism and its effects on society.
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 belief has some drawbacks, it is argued that there are more benefits. On the one hand, the feeling of loving a
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 has some disadvantages. It may cause many compatriots to deliberately ignore the latest changes or improvements happening around the world
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 because they have a discredited ideology of superiority which is biased towards our own identity, possibilities, talents, abilities, and generally the current situation.
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,
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 living in
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North Korea who are mainly loyal to their
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 and leader, usually do not know how massive changes are occurring around the world.
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, they remain isolated, and cannot go through the modern world.
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, it can be considered that the advantages of devotion to a
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 are even more significant. The benefits can be categorized
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 economic and social groups.
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, when
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 love their countries, they try to do everything to find their
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 developed economically.
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wealthy
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 do not send their money out and invest in the potential sectors of their local community.
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, the rate of employment and
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, economic growth
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.
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patriotic
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 are usually eager
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 their local
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, customs, history, and religion. They are naturally into keeping and passing down the social values to the
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 generation. In conclusion, it seems that the economic and social benefits of
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vigorous support of the
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 outweigh the drawbacks.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fosters
  • sense of belonging
  • strengthening societal bonds
  • instills
  • pride and loyalty
  • excessive
  • nationalism
  • intolerance
  • discrimination
  • conflict
  • blind allegiance
  • flawed policies
  • unifying force
  • crisis
  • manipulated
  • political leaders
  • division
  • advocating
  • responsibility
  • civic duty
  • engaged
  • informed citizenship
  • balanced and inclusive
  • cultural diversity
  • marginalize
  • minority groups
  • stifle dissent
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