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Some people think that watching TV programmes can help children’s development while others disagree. What is your opinion?

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Some say it would be beneficial to
children
 to watch TV shows while others argue that it could harm them. As I agree and disagree with both ideas, I believe that
children
 are delicate beings and must be preserved from dangerous sources. In
this
 essay, I’ll give my thoughts about it.
First
 of all,
watch
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 box is a unique item to identify since it has lots of purposes to be described. While there
are
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 a billion dollars worth of media industry out there that wouldn’t think about ethical perspectives, they could create contents that might end up with psychological traumas on young just to be watched more.
For instance
, a child exposes to a horror movie,
such
 as Scream, would be harmed in an emotional way. Just because of that,
children
 should be at a safe distance
with
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 their parents
from
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TV.
On the other hand
, as its dangers described above, I would like to mention its advantages from my perspective. As a big brother of 3, I think some programmes are relatively helpful to parents, especially the well-rated ones. While
children
 are spending their leisure time with safe-to-watch content, it is possible to get educated just simply by looking at some of them. There are multiple channels that are broadcasting lesson-embed TV shows that can easily be found on television. Despite the fact that there are harmful things on it, we can not deny that it could be useful and helpful. In a conclusion, technological revolutions bring their own dilemmas. Since it is possible to get harmed by something, it is
also
 possible to gain development from it. It is all about how we’re using it, like a famous scientist saying, “Everything could be dangerous. The key is, finding its potential”. Despite it could be dangerous to a child, if provoked in a helpful way it might help them to be improved.
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