Some people think that competitive sports have a positive effect on the education of teenagers while others argue that the effect is negative. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
People’s opinions differ, as to whether or not competitive
sports
Use synonyms
effect
Correct your spelling
affect
on
the education of adolescents while others think it can affect negatively. Change preposition
apply
Although
there are some strong arguments in Linking Words
favor
of bad influence, I still believe that it can be beneficial for the child.
Change the spelling
favour
To begin
with, competitive Linking Words
sports
motivate youngsters to train harder, Use synonyms
to
dedicate more quality time to the sport that they are into, Fix the infinitive
apply
to
follow Fix the infinitive
apply
healthy
way of life, Add an article
a healthy
to
eat healthy food, Fix the infinitive
apply
to
avoid bad habits, stick to the regime and many other things that they need to follow in order to be competitive and win. As Fix the infinitive
apply
the
victory is the main goal. In many Correct article usage
apply
cases
young people are ready to sacrifice even their free time in order to get the best results Add a comma
,cases
on
some championships. Change preposition
in
In addition
, the game Linking Words
reduce
stress, Change the verb form
reduces
Correct word choice
and banish
banish
different emotional problems as it is a good way to distract from one’s daily problems. Correct subject-verb agreement
banishes
Furthermore
, playing in teamsLinking Words
,
helps to develop team-building skills, Remove the comma
apply
communication
skills, Correct word choice
and communication
to
get more friends with common interests and be more productive at school as all the important areas of life are in balance.
In Fix the infinitive
apply
a
marked contrast, people who opt for Remove the article
apply
negative
sides of competitive Correct article usage
the negative
sports
claim that Use synonyms
lose
provokes in teenagers, depression, self-hate and even attempts to commit suicide. Replace the word
loss
As a
great Change preposition
A
solutions
to Correct the article-noun agreement
solution
this
problem is to have different phycological sessions, where professionals will share some tips Linking Words
how
to handle these Change preposition
on how
type
of feelings and invite different Fix the agreement mistake
types
sports
players to share their experiences of tackling the feelings of Use synonyms
fail
.
In conclusion, while some claim that competitive Replace the word
failure
sports
can undermine Use synonyms
confidence
of youngsters when they fail, I strongly believe that playing Add an article
the confidence
sports
Use synonyms
have
more advantages than disadvantages, it helps to develop the minors not only athletically but Correct subject-verb agreement
has
also
Linking Words
helping
Wrong verb form
helps
Correct your spelling
them
hem
to understand and value the competition and even if they fail, they feel they have achieved something, or they have overcome something developing them in better versions of themselves.Correct your spelling
them
Submitted by riveraeka55 on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Fully explain your ideas
To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).
For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.