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As we are facing more and more problems, which affect the whole planet, good relationships between different countries are becoming more important than ever before. To what extent do you agree or diasgree?

#planet #relationships #countries #diasgree
Nowadays most
of
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the
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countries
 are facing
the
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problems
racism
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of racism
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, terrorism and other environmental issues so
that
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having
good
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a good
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relationship
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 between different
countries
 is more important
in
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nowadays. To
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extend
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, I agree
to
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 the notion and the agreement for the statement is
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To begin
 with,
good
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relationship
 with many
countries
 will help to improve their exports and import of
the
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goods and raw materials in the market and
also
 helps to improve the
countries
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 economy.
This
 leads to buit large infrastructure and
also
able
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 to provide basic amenities.
Secondly
,
good
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relationship
 will
helps
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 to establish the branches in other
countries
 with their reputation in society.
This
 makes the company
to
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grow worldwide and
also
 able to make good
standard
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 in other
countries
.
Thirdly
, being
good
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a good
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relationship
 with other
countries
 will
helps
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in case
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incase
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in case
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 of
emergency
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an emergency
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situation
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situations
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 like
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a flood
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flood
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floods
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, financial
crisis
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,
environmental
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 issues.
This
 leads the country to hold and fight against the problem and easily able to solve them. To conclude
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,
have
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good
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a good
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relationship
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relationships
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others
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with others
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 will
helps
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 to irradicate poverty and other financial issues
as
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 providing the loan with proper criteria.
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