Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook, Zalo,...) have a negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent
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, there are several social
media
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platforms
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, among
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are tik tok,
twitter
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,
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.A lot of
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people
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of the notion that these social
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sites have a bad impact on the
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and the public. I totally agree
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view and
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paragraph will discuss
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details
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and support them with references.
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of all,social
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made it possible to communicate and share
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what we do daily with our families and friends both near and far.
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we are able to make friends
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we share
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and some we have not seen in real life.Through these
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, fashion trends and other
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artwork
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art work
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are
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shared.
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people
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seem to jump quickly to join the fun of what is trending through advertisements.
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, on
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, a lot of young girls put on
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show which does not show good morals.if
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.
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, these days social
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platforms
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are been used as online shops. A lot of advertising goes on there. When caution is not taken, one might spend
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a lot
alot
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of time searching and eventually spending all your money. In conclusion,
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social
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has
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influence on
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