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Economic progress is considered a significant factor to measure a country's success. But many people think that other factors should be considered when measuring the success of a country. What other factors do you think measure a country's success? Among these, is one more important than the others?

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 modern world, economic development is considered
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 essential point to calculate a nation's
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, the majority of
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 think that other factors should be considered when
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calculating
 the advance of a
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,
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 as
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education
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system
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health
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program
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. I
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belive
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health
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care
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 is way more
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crucial
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 of all,
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education
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system
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 is
vital
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 factor that should be accounted for
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country
 progress because a
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success
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education
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system
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 can directly impact the recent and even future of
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nation
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 development.
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Government
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Government
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 should provide
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opportunity
oppertunty
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opportunity
to
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 every
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children
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 to study in school.
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, many developed countries have their own law to make sure every kid
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 on campus during a certain period of time.
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, some countries require a high level of
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instructors
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instructors
 in order to protect learners
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 been
proper
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 educated.
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,
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health
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care
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 aspect
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 is
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 essential factor to cause a
country
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 to be
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succeeded
successed
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successful
. The reason why a
health
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care
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 is
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crucial
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crucial
 is everyone
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 it; every people can be sick. If there is
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perfect
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prepect
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perfect
health
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care
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, the death rate can be decreased obviously due to proper medication treatments.
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, Taiwan is one of
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country
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countries
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that is
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 having a
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success
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health
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care
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program
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. Their government support a full payment cover for all residents to see
doctor
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a doctor
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 in
public
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a public
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 clinic.
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 Taiwan is very famous
about
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their
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its
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success
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health
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care
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program
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. To sum up,
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 economic progress is an important sign of
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country's
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a country's
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success
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,
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education
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the education
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system
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 and
health
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care
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program
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that
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apply
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also
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 can be measured as a
symble
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symbol
 of
nation's
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a nation's
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success
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, and I consider
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health
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the health
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care
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program
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 is the most crucial to present how
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success
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successful
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 a
country
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 is.
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