Economic progress is considered a significant factor to measure a country's success. But many people think that other factors should be considered when measuring the success of a country. What other factors do you think measure a country's success? Among these, is one more important than the others?

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modern world, economic development is considered
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essential point to calculate a nation's
success
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However
, the majority of
population
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the population
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think that other factors should be considered when
calculatong
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calculating
the advance of a
country
,
such
as
education
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the education
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system
and
health
care
program
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belive
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health
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the health
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care
program
is way more
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crucial
critical
than the other.
First
of all,
education
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the education
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system
is
vital
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a vital
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factor that should be accounted for
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country
progress because a
success
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education
system
can directly impact the recent and even future of
a
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nation
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development.
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Government
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Government
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should provide
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opportunity
oppertunty
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opportunity
to
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every
childern
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children
child
to study in school.
For instance
, many developed countries have their own law to make sure every kid
study
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on campus during a certain period of time.
Moreover
, some countries require a high level of
education
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the
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instructors
instrutors
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instructors
in order to protect learners
have
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who have
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been
proper
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educated.
On the other hand
,
health
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the health
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care
aspect
also
is
a
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essential factor to cause a
country
to be
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succeeded
successed
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successful
. The reason why a
health
care
program
is
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crucial
crutial
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crucial
is everyone
need
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it; every people can be sick. If there is
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perfect
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prepect
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perfect
health
care
program
, the death rate can be decreased obviously due to proper medication treatments.
For example
, Taiwan is one of
a
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the
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developed
country
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countries
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that is
having a
success
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health
care
program
. Their government support a full payment cover for all residents to see
doctor
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a doctor
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in
public
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a public
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clinic.
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Taiwan is very famous
about
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their
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its
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success
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health
care
program
. To sum up,
Although
economic progress is an important sign of
country's
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a country's
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success
,
education
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the education
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system
and
health
care
program
that
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apply
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also
can be measured as a
symble
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symbol
of
nation's
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a nation's
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success
, and I consider
health
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the health
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care
program
is the most crucial to present how
success
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successful
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a
country
is.
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