You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, explain your situation describe your problems tell him/her when you think you can move in

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Dear

Ms.

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Johnson, My name is Artem ALtukhov and I am a student of the computer science course

that is

starting on September, 1st. I was advised to reach you in case of any emergencies, and ,

unfortunately

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I have one. The bottom line is that I have an issue with my accommodation. I booked everything in advance, but the landlord of the apartment I was going to rent decided to cancel the deal at

last

the moment. I have already found a substitution but the problem is that I will be able to move in on September 5th. Since I am relocating from Russia, I will not have a place to live.

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why I have to skip the

first

few days of the course. I already bought tickets and I am going to arrive on September 4th, I suppose I will be ready to attend the class the

day. If it is an issue, could you please recommend what options I have? I was thinking about listening to lectures online

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but have not found any information regarding

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. Yours sincerely, Artem Altukhov.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

185 words

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You are due to move into a rented apartment next month but you will not be able to because you have some problems. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, explain your situation describe your problems tell him/her when you think you can move in

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Some people think that children benefit from the TV and they should spend much time on it, but others support that children should not watch TV. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

All companies should provide sports and social facilities to the local community. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

At present the population of some countries include a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer with relevant example.

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?