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Some people think that governments should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The given table demonstrates the average
time
 that
spend
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 on various daily activities by
males
 and
female
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females
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 in the UK, separately. Overall, it is noticeable that both
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 spend
time
 the most on sleeping, whereas the amount of
time
that
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used
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to
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on
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 sport is the least.
In addition
, a great disparity
of
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in
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time
 can be seen in the category of
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housework
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house work
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housework
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. Looking
first
 at sleep and leisure, the
time
 that men and women spend
on
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sleeping, at 8.04
hours
 and 8.18
hours
, is the highest among all activities. The average hour
that
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spent on different
leisures
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leisure
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 by
males
 and females are relatively similar, whereas
males
shows
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the
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a
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 higher amount of
time
 on total leisure, at 5.25,
where
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while
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 women have about 4.53. Moving onto the category of employment and study,
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housework
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house work
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housework
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 and childcare, a marked gap can be seen in these activities. The average
time
 male spend on employment and study, at 3.45
hours
, is higher than that of women, at 4.53;
however
, with regard to doing chores and caring
children
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for children
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, females show over a doubled amount of
time
than
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as
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males
. Females spent 3
hours
 and 0.32
hours
 on housework and childcare, whereas
males
 spent merely 1.41hours and 0.15
hours
 a day.
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