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Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing.

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The pie chart illustrates the various destinations of
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graduates
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 from one university and the table shows their income levels after working for 5 years in three different sectors. Overall, working full-time is the most popular choice among the
graduates
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, with 52% of the students taking a full-time position. In terms of wages, while 80% of the freelance consultants and government employees earned at least $75000, only over half of those who worked for private
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 made the same amount of money. Regarding the pie chart, the majority of the
graduates
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 had a full-time job. The proportion of those who work part-time and unemployed,
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, were significantly lower, at only 15% and 12% respectively. Meanwhile, the figures for
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graduates
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 choosing to do full-time postgrad study and the unknown group are identical, at 8%. The remaining 5% of
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graduates
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 decided to do part-time work while pursuing postgrad degrees. Turning to the table,
graduates
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 majoring in
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 working as freelance consultants and government employees had a higher level of salary than private
companies
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 workers, 80% of them earned at least $75000. Compared to private
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, only 55% of them earn a minimum of $75000.
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, within the lowest wage range, $25000-49999, the figure for freelance consultants and the government sector both accounted for 5% while the proportion of private
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 workers is twofold to the others, at 10%.

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