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Many famous sports players advertise sports products. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

#sports #players #products #trend
Nowadays it is true that the number of
sports
 teams, clubs and organisations
fans are
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 growing every day. They become more popular. And
currently
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 most of them advertise
sports
 products
in
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on
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their social networking sites. From
the
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 personal point of view, I reckon that advertising output
such
 celebrities
are
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 right, for various reasons, but
overall
 is the major convenience factor and I believe that the benefits of doing so far outweigh any disadvantages involved. One of the main positive
sign
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signs
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 is introducing
people
 to
sports
though
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through
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 their idols.
It is clear that
 amount of
people
 who take an interest in training significantly decreased. But it can be fixed thanks to the well-known
player
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players
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 who advertise
sports
 foods. A good example
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of
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is that
people
 follow their idols through the application and in their stories they notice how
sportsman
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sportsmen
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 train or advise some cool product that will assist the body.
Admirer
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 would like to be like them.
Hence
, in the long
run
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 interest in exercising will wake up and even can start doing
this
.
However
, not all the bloggers are honest. Many of them may advertise substandard productions because of the money.
People
 believe in it and start using
without
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 knowing the destination and something bad can happen.
For instance
 person see the produce which counsel his favourite sport team. And he purchased it without knowing any information about
this
 product. Perhaps he is allergic to
this
 thing or should not drink it. And
as a result
, he can suffer or even get sick. In conclusion,
personally
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 I believe the benefits of advertising
sports
 products
far
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are far
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 greater than any drawbacks.
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