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Many countries have now banned smoking in public places. Some people feel that government should ban smoking entirely. Do you agree or disagree?

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A lot of folks believe that smoking should be banned. Most , world countries have banned smoking in public. Some suggest that they banned smoking fully. I think that smoking must be banned because it damages too many populations and sometimes even kill them. In
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 with, some communities think that smoking is okay just because they think it is a personal choice and the person doing it has the right to choose whether they want to smoke or not.
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, the country itself benefits from taxing the cigarettes that enter it. so many stores
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 benefit from selling cigarettes because the community of smoking are so addicted to smoking that they will even buy it if it is expensive.
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 two of many reasons countries still allow smoking in non-public places.
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, smokers when they smoke in privet do not affect or damage anybody.
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, Some feel that they banned smoking entirely because It generally decreases an individual's health.
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, 90% of people who smoke have diseases
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 as cancer, heart disease, stroke, lung diseases, diabetes and so many more and 10% of them have had serious people with it. Banning smoking could result in a very positive society
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 clean not only from the outside but
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 from the inside. In conclusion, banning smoking could very much result positive ,
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 result negatively for the country itself. I believe that it is a good move to ban smoking so we can improve our society.
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